Moon Mastered

⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀An orange waning moon snaps a bitter bite
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀out of her eastern climb through her own broken
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀skies. She can’t believe in a love she can’t master.
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀She lies in her master’s lap. He makes the moon
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀see what he wants her to believe, bite by bite
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀of poisoned fruit broken off the shadows’ climb.
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀So steep, so sheer a climb is night to master!
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀In a lake of tears, broken and dark, the moon
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ripples on each bite of wind, too hurt to believe.
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀”Why bother to believe? Your day’s done. Climb
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀into bed, I won’t bite,” tugs the leash her master
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀has over her mirrored moon, dirty and broken,
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀then having herself broken any vow she’d believe
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀worth keeping, the moon quits her cursed climb,
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀as easy for her to master as an anorexic bite.
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀A sip of blood, a bite of innocent skin, a broken
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀word, a lie given her master, a dream to disbelieve
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀— her night must climb into the fall of her moon.

written for Get Listed ~ Of Catnip & Moons
at the imaginary garden with real toads

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17 Responses to Moon Mastered

  1. Kay Davies says:

    This is lovely, especially the third stanza. “So steep, so sheer a climb is night to master!”

  2. Marian says:

    holy cow, this is fascinating.

  3. maggie says:

    Sara must be smiling.

  4. Timoteo says:

    The repetition of words such as moon, master, and bite was very effective Amazing poem!

    • It’s a relatively simple verse form variation Sara did some poems in. Simple in the sense that she used it as a stepping stone to reach to more intricate variations.

      Unfold each line into two lines around the repeated word in the middle of each line, so each stanza has six lines, and you have the repeated words following the basic course laid out for a sestina (sans envoy). I wasn’t as happy with my repetition here, so I keep coming back to it and might eventually make some major renovations. But yes, sestina repetition can be effective, and I’m happy you felt it to be so here. Thanks. ✒Cyn

  5. Helen Dehner says:

    I love the mystery in your words … otherworldly stuff.

  6. Frances D says:

    Oh my – this is good. That first line and stanza grabbed and pulled me in.

    • Thank you. I’ve expressed in an earlier comment here that I’m not entirely happy with this poem. But when I go back at it for another version, the first stanza will likely remain mostly intact. Frequently I write a poem from the end backward or from the inside out, but for this one it was the first stanza that squeezed the rest of it out. Cyn

  7. wolfsrosebud says:

    Mystery indeed… and dark

  8. All those ‘moons’ and all those ‘nights’
    let’s eat an orange
    listen only
    no ink

    • If I do work on redraft of this, one of the things I want to try to tighten up would be the multiple reflections. In the limited space I’m giving to it, that won’t be easy, but it’s like being in one of those mirrored elevators where you can see dozens of you despite the tight quarters. Cyn

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