Modern Moonlight

⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀Who needs
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀cable news
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀fitting stats
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀on bulge
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀and shine
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀in with wars
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀and scandals,
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀and who needs
⠀⠀⠀⠀a dedicated channel
⠀⠀⠀to forecast whether
⠀⠀⠀clouds will appear
⠀⠀to come between,
⠀⠀and who needs
⠀an official website
⠀with charts
⠀that reach
thousands
and thousands
and tens of thousands
of years beyond
our turn,
and who needs
⠀an app
⠀to keep track
⠀of the phase,
⠀⠀and who even needs
⠀⠀domestic surveillance
⠀⠀⠀to make sure
⠀⠀⠀we keep safe
⠀⠀⠀⠀from what might fall,
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀and who needs
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀anything remotely
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀more modern
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀than the heart
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀we have had
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀from the first
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀to know
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀where
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀and how
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀our moon
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀will be
⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀tonight?




written for Daily Prompt: 21st Century Citizen
at the Daily Post

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61 Responses to Modern Moonlight

  1. I like the way the poem is presented. It’s pretty creative

  2. mgadelmawla says:

    Interesting!

  3. DontCallMeLiv says:

    Reblogged this on My Brain Is In My Bra.

  4. Well done, love the imagery. Thank you.

  5. So clever!
    Excellent post
    🙂

  6. Form and content merge to make something greater than either separately. Wonderfull wordcraft. Merci.

  7. Bootiful! Just been staying in a tribal highland village in Vietnam where they don’t even have electricity and the moon looked better than ever she did again 🙂

    • We had a taste of that with power outages where I was last winter. Where I’ve moved to, there’s more light pollution than I’m used to, so it’s like holding my breath to the next clear night I’ll be out away from everything.

      • I know that feeling well! It’s so weird how civilisation so often forces us to live in big cities and we so often long to leave them! I left London forever recently and it was the best move I ever made…

  8. awax1217 says:

    Loved how you did the crescent. Reminds me of E.E. Ciummings. Great job.

  9. how creative and lovely depiction of today’s word. congratulations on being freshly pressed.

  10. segmation says:

    So how was the moon then last night?

  11. Congrats on being Freshly Pressed! Really enjoyed your concrete poem. We have similar styles. I love shape poems. If you get a chance, check out my concrete poem (Waxing Poetic) of a crescent moon complete with eye, nose, lips and the big dipper. I look forward to following you! Keep up the inspired poetry and have a relaxing Sunday!
    Cheers,
    Tyler 🙂

    • Thanks. Concrete is not my preferred form, but I did feel this one called for it. And I do enjoy reading concrete form. (I took the liberty of editing your comment to include a link to the one you wrote, I hope you don’t mind, say if so.)

      • Thank you for including the link to my poem. I appreciate it! Keep up the excellent poetry on your blog and congrats again on being Freshly Pressed! When they say dust off the welcome mat, they aren’t kidding 😉 Hope the follows keep piling up for you, my friend!
        Cheers,
        Tyler

  12. I’ll be honest – I’m always reading about Food and Travel. Your innovative way of writing the poem lured me here. How beautiful!

  13. perryinabox says:

    That was very creative! It’s hard to write modern poetry in such an interesting fashion. I don’t know that I’ve come across any poetry with references to modern-day innovations that I actually appreciated. It’s all just so…rap-esque. You are talented. Awesome!

    • Thank you for your comment.

      I’m not convinced that poetic form, style, or method has changed all that much over the centuries. I myself am not into rap, but I can picture modern rappers fitting right in with the medieval troubadours whose art led to much of our modern poetry tradition.

      In a sense, I thought to make some similar connection here, in response to the prompt “modern,” upon thinking how millennia ago there were as many years that held a night on which the moon appeared as awesome as it did this past month.

  14. I really love the format of this poem. I am going to print it so I can read it to my 4-year old and he can see it. He will love it!
    Congrats on being Freshly Pressed!

  15. Soul Walker says:

    Interesting format. I like what you have done.

  16. Beautiful poem, thanks for sharing! Also, congrats on being freshly pressed! Keep up the great writing 🙂
    http://stepstochangetheworld.wordpress.com/

  17. Nana K. says:

    amazing work. the creativity was not limited to the words but also to the presentation. impressive.

    • Thanks. I had help on the layout, from a friend who helps me with other layout things.

      And I don’t do concrete poetry often, but I do appreciate it when others write it. And the moon made me do it.

  18. Nana K. says:

    Reblogged this on kofinyamekye and commented:
    poetry is about presentation too. no need to limit the creativity to coined phrases and black and white personification.

  19. Reblogged this on SurceaseOfSorrow and commented:
    This is fantastic. All I have to say is: Kudos

  20. El-Nino says:

    This was a beautiful read! Damn!

  21. jesskathoughts says:

    Reblogged this on jesskathoughts and commented:
    Love this.

  22. mesridhi says:

    LOVED YOUR WORK.. great job! 🙂

  23. Mike says:

    This lovely piece applies Occam’s Razor to extract the fundamental essence of life. Excellent concept, voice, presentation, language and phrasing. Great work.

  24. Heartafire says:

    Beautiful formatting! Wonderful

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